tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3320087.post7672689152124367355..comments2024-03-22T15:15:09.943-04:00Comments on Lionel Deimel’s Web Log: A Labor Day Lament, Version 2Lionel Deimelhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08363018512775944659noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3320087.post-89909412558689941892011-09-14T23:04:54.768-04:002011-09-14T23:04:54.768-04:00None whatsoever. This whole poem brings into focus...None whatsoever. This whole poem brings into focus what is truly going on, under our own eyes, and yet we choose to ignore it. THAT is an arrogant act committed by a nation asleep (or seduced by the murmur of the radio, or the eroticism of sleeping with big business ), for which our country should expect no favors.Peterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12789184654143401706noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3320087.post-83595223212950293032011-09-14T13:11:11.940-04:002011-09-14T13:11:11.940-04:00Peter,
Your point is well taken, and I was unsure...Peter,<br /><br />Your point is well taken, and I was unsure about “where the hell.” I will consider going back to the original line or something like it.<br /><br />Do you have any other objections to this version?Lionel Deimelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08363018512775944659noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3320087.post-41309876804723659402011-09-10T23:23:30.165-04:002011-09-10T23:23:30.165-04:00I didn't care for the "where the hell&quo...I didn't care for the "where the hell" change. Just a little bit crass, in a work that is otherwise elegant, on a subject that is melancholy, at best.Peterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12789184654143401706noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3320087.post-63389387182420532072011-09-09T18:31:33.749-04:002011-09-09T18:31:33.749-04:00Peter,
Sorry to hear that. Can you be more specif...Peter,<br /><br />Sorry to hear that. Can you be more specific?Lionel Deimelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08363018512775944659noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3320087.post-25919562932806424552011-09-09T18:00:57.997-04:002011-09-09T18:00:57.997-04:00I like the original better.I like the original better.Peterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12789184654143401706noreply@blogger.com